Thursday, August 2, 2012

F55 - The Ghastly Sight

The knife pierced the woman’s chest and tore its way in, triggering a vehement flow of blood.

Unperturbed by the ghastly sight, the man continued.

A lump sum had been promised.

He had a family to run! It was not his first time anyways.

Hours later they switched off the lamp outside the operation theatre.

87 comments:

  1. Ouch! But yeah, right.
    Another good one, Jaish.

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  2. Wow! I thought at first that it was a person who had been hired to kill.... Well written!

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  3. Jaishree you can so much in just so few words:) Amazing!

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    1. Thank you Rahul. I am humbled by that comment :D

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  4. Ewww...the last twist was awesome! An explosive..kudos!

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  5. OMG...what a twist:)
    Great Jayashree!

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    1. Thanks Amitji. Quite some time since you wrote any F55s...I guess time for one? :)

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    2. Ha ha ha:):D
      Thank you Jaish!

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  6. Ahha! Great jaish! Multi-faceted talent!

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  7. Jeyashree, That was awesome. I really did not guess till I read the last line. You write brilliantly!

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    1. Thanks Rachna. I did think that if readers jumped to the last line then it would have no effect! :)

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  8. Very smartly done. The punch was excellently delivered.

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  9. that was a nice and unexpected twist!!

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    1. Thanks Deb . I thought readers might guess :)

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  10. If you had not provided that twist at the end it would have depicted the darker side of a man.

    Awesome jaishree. I loved it. Nobody would guess it till the end. Brilliant F55 :)

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    1. Yes Mak but actually it was depicting a noble side of man :D Thanks for the comments :)

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  11. You really know how to stump your readers-very well narrated!

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  12. Superb narration. The twist in the end was amazing..!

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  13. what a twist Jaish..loved the post :)

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  14. Wow! Loved the end. Took a second to register but when it did, I was like Brilliant!!!!

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  15. First time here. What an introduction to your writing! Superbly executed!

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    1. Welcome to my blog Juggler. Thanks for the comment and do keep visiting :)

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    1. :) Reminds you of what from your college days Sabyasachi? Thanks for stepping in :)

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  17. brilliantly written...
    www.duringmytimes.com

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    1. Thanks Akshay :D thanks for the non stop encouragement

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  19. Very intelligent I should say :) Good one

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  20. Bloody funny! ;)

    That was short and sweet

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  21. Nice twist! Finally understood what anagnorisis means :)

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    1. That's a new word I learnt today . Thanks :)

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  22. That was a superb way to end to a ghastly sight! Well Done, Jaish! :)

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  23. That was one epic post!!! What an end!!! Loved it :) superb one Jaish!

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    1. Epic post ?? Ha ha , thanks harikrishna .

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  24. Uhh. So, the doctor was in there just for the money?

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    1. Oops Medha, no one asked me that...Hmm!! He also does it for money...Is that not the case mostly?

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  25. Keep functioning ,fantastic job! www.maachittoor.com

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  26. hahaha...... you got me with that one.

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  27. This is just Wow :-). Till the last line, I thought he was a paid murderer. Awesome :-). Loved it :-)

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  28. The shortest suspense story.
    Wonder what Conan Doyle would have to say about it :-)

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