Tuesday, October 22, 2013

Scenes unfolded - 100 words on Saturday

I was panting and perspiring in the torturous heat of the prison kitchens as the smoke angrily sped into my lungs. Yet the exuberant chillness I felt inside was unperturbed. I knew it was my last day there. Suddenly I heard screams. It was the recent arrival Kapil; another innocent yet misfortunate soul! That horrendous monster Ranga was crushing him under his bulk and sniggering.


Scenes from the past unfolded. On the floor, I saw my quivering Reshma and the brute who had destroyed her years ago; the man I murdered. Furiously I brought the ladle crashing on Ranga’s head.


100 Words on Saturday - Write Tribe


Linking this to 100 Words on Saturday at Write Tribe prompt of "I knew it was my last day here".

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    1. :) was trying to think of something happy on the prompt but could not Shilpa :)

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  2. Good!You have told a lot in just 100 words.

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    1. Thanks Indu. I did find it a little difficult to restrict it to a hundred words :)

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  3. Kept me visualizing the scene. Powerful writing, Jaya.

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    1. Very encouraging comment . Thanks :)

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  4. So much in so few words..you told a lot. :)

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  5. Heart pounding and thrilling climax. A tale of retributive justice after the tragedy as evil is destroyed:)

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  6. That was a really poignant story.

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  7. THat's so sad....just when he was getting his taste of freedom!

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  8. The end was stunning! Great writing!

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  9. A few words make up a wonderful story than many chapters together, just like your 100 word story! Powerful!

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  10. This has immense visual appeal. Brilliant.

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    1. Thanks for the encouraging words Alka.

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  11. Hi Jayashree,
    That was a brilliant take on the topic ! Even though tragic, the portrayal was awesome !!

    Have been reading your blog for sometime now...comment panna bhayam, athuthaan pannalai :)

    Pls accept the liebster status from my blog :) Do hop in and check :)

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    1. Why bhayam???? Thanks a ton for the liebster :)

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  12. 100 potent words, Jaish. Sent a chill through my heart.

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  13. Wow, yes that was something, Jaish! Chilly alright!

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